Show Don't Tell - Viking Girl

This is my show don't tell writing were I have to portray and emotion rather than just say she was grumpy we have to explain what it looked like and what she did.

She stormed down the hall slamming all the doors as she went leaving chaos in her wake. Mum! She screamed as she entered the kitchen.” Everyone said they were out of candy then they gave the princess behind me all the candy they wanted but they told me they had none!” Don’t you dare come home and talk to me like that!,Especially after I worked so hard on that costume! “Go to your room this instant” roaded her father.

Fine! She wailed. She ran to her room and tore off the blue and gold helmet and threw  it out the window like it was the most horrible thing in the world. I know I will regret it later but for now I feel like a queen she thought knowingly.She entered the bathroom and washed off the expensive makeup as it was giving her a rash.     

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She stormed down the hall slamming all the doors as she went leaving chaos in her wake. Mum! She screamed as she entered the kitchen.” Everyone said they were out of candy then they gave the princess behind me all the candy they wanted but they told me they had none!” Don’t you dare come home and talk to me like that!,Especially after I worked so hard on that costume! “Go to your room this instant” roaded her father.

Fine! She wailed. She ran to her room and tore off the blue and gold helmet and threw  it out the window like it was the most horrible thing in the world. I know I will regret it later but for now I feel like a queen she thought knowingly.She entered the bathroom and washed off the expensive makeup as it was giving her a rash.